Needs work on pacing.
The advice you gave was fine, and so was the level of animation.
However, for actual advice, I recommend working on your pacing. It simply too long to finish. I was kind of bored halfway through. Two things to make pacing faster are one, dont drag the lines so much or leave empty spaces between them, or two, use generic music to fill the void,
I know you're not going to read my review, or even reply to it, but I'm going to think you read this anyway, or by some supernatural force you ended up taking my advice without reading it.
Lulz.